This is what it looked like in our classroom this morning. This large group of students were huddled around the board creating a shared poem together. It was really fun for me to see this large group of students collaborate, compromise, brainstorm, and write together. They filled up one chart paper, and wanted another! I started the poem with the line "I couldn't believe what I was seeing," and I didn't know where the students would take it. Here is where it went...
I couldn't believe what I was seeing
a dark scary shadow seemed to float across the room
AHHH!
It's coming closer, closer, closer
Until I feel it rub against my skin!
I don't dare to open my eyes
but, I did!
I see
Nothing
Just nothing
The dark shadow seems
to creep behind me, but I can't see it
but I can hear it
I turn around swiftly
I crawl on all fours
charging towards the door
I stand
I run
I trip!
The silence of nothing
Just me breathing
The door slams
behind me
I'm locked in!
I see the window
opened and the curtains blowing
and I hear...
the screeching of the door
I hear the wooden floor beneath my feet
The scratching of the wooden door
louder, louder, louder
the yellow and red eyes
looking at
ME!
They disappeared
I can't move
frozen
hoping it's something else!
a switch turning
sounds like the bedroom doorknob!
I turn around
The door is opened
I stop
stare
and look!
I see it!
a dark scary shadow seemed to float across the room
AHHH!
It's coming closer, closer, closer
Until I feel it rub against my skin!
I don't dare to open my eyes
but, I did!
I see
Nothing
Just nothing
The dark shadow seems
to creep behind me, but I can't see it
but I can hear it
I turn around swiftly
I crawl on all fours
charging towards the door
I stand
I run
I trip!
The silence of nothing
Just me breathing
The door slams
behind me
I'm locked in!
I see the window
opened and the curtains blowing
and I hear...
the screeching of the door
I hear the wooden floor beneath my feet
The scratching of the wooden door
louder, louder, louder
the yellow and red eyes
looking at
ME!
They disappeared
I can't move
frozen
hoping it's something else!
a switch turning
sounds like the bedroom doorknob!
I turn around
The door is opened
I stop
stare
and look!
I see it!
Isn't that scary?! Even though it is a scary poem (not my favorite genre), the kids did a terrific job using imagery and telling the events in a step-by-step fashion. While this group huddled around the board, other students were posting poetry to think.com, reading poetry with a friend, or writing poetry with a friend. Poetry Fridays are quickly becoming a favorite activity for our class. I love it when the students walk in and say (in a sing-song way), "Yeah! It's Poetry Friday!"
2 comments:
I love your poem! You did a marvelous job of creating suspense, particularly with the "silence of nothing."
Here's a challenge: why don't you write a poem about your fantastic teacher, Mr. Brown? He is the best! Dula
You're too kind! I also loved that line - "the silence of nothing." Because of a busy morning, we didn't have Poetry Friday today (the 7th) - it was encouraging that many of the kids were disappointed! We'll have it again next week.
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